X-COM RP THINK TANK (part2)

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Adrammalech

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Taxor_the_First said:
Teachers like him don't get that English - especially when it comes to creative writing - is subjective.
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This is absolutely the case, because even though the assignment was called "revision" and the assignment details were "take what feedback you received and make major revisions to one of your works," the feedback I got was just the teacher saying "I don't like the story." He actually literally prefaced it with "It looks like you were very invested in making major changes." tldr below

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Besides, if you were a shit writer, why were you getting an A in the first place?
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Because I followed directions. The thing about CRW in college is that none of the teachers want to read a novel per student. The college I'm in is fairly large too, and the class sizes are 50-200 people. So it's always short stories and poems, which I don't like to do. So when I saw 13 weeks ago that we had to draft a storyline for a "major" fiction work, I came up with a universe, settings, characters with deep flaws, etc. and figured how they'd act with a certain catalyst. Then two weeks later they said now take that and make a story with a crisis and a resolution, maximum 3000 words (a very short short story). So while everyone else was doing sisters fighting and boyfriends breaking up urban near-nonfiction crap, I'm stuck with this medieval Don Quixote dumbass who has to have complete redemption in 3-4 pages. Big surprise, that's near impossible, and I get a 60% and all these feedback like "wow your protagonist sounds really naive" or "wow your protagonist seems really impulsive" which are considered bad things instead of, you know, complex character design. Then for the grand final (35% of the grade), I have to revise that story. So I go back, read everyone's comments, fix all the typos and grammar mistakes, change the ending to make her responsible for being a dumbass, and add even more petting the dog to the point where she's basically being fluffed by the narrator every paragraph compared with everyone else in the story being like "you're dumb and I don't like following you (but I have to to advance the story)." Then I get a flat 80% and the teacher says "all this talk about the protagonist seems forced, like fanfiction," bringing me down to a 89% total. Literally the only way I could've done what they asked would be cutting 2/3 of the story and just having someone be like "no, you should just stop."
 
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Adrammalech said:
This is absolutely the case, because even though the assignment was called "revision" and the assignment details were "take what feedback you received and make major revisions to one of your works," the feedback I got was just the teacher saying "I don't like the story." He actually literally prefaced it with "It looks like you were very invested in making major changes." tldr below



Because I followed directions. The thing about CRW in college is that none of the teachers want to read a novel per student. The college I'm in is fairly large too, and the class sizes are 50-200 people. So it's always short stories and poems, which I don't like to do. So when I saw 13 weeks ago that we had to draft a storyline for a "major" fiction work, I came up with a universe, settings, characters with deep flaws, etc. and figured how they'd act with a certain catalyst. Then two weeks later they said now take that and make a story with a crisis and a resolution, maximum 3000 words (a very short short story). So while everyone else was doing sisters fighting and boyfriends breaking up urban near-nonfiction crap, I'm stuck with this medieval Don Quixote dumbass who has to have complete redemption in 3-4 pages. Big surprise, that's near impossible, and I get a 60% and all these feedback like "wow your protagonist sounds really naive" or "wow your protagonist seems really impulsive" which are considered bad things instead of, you know, complex character design. Then for the grand final (35% of the grade), I have to revise that story. So I go back, read everyone's comments, fix all the typos and grammar mistakes, change the ending to make her responsible for being a dumbass, and add even more petting the dog to the point where she's basically being fluffed by the narrator every paragraph compared with everyone else in the story being like "you're dumb and I don't like following you (but I have to to advance the story)." Then I get a flat 80% and the teacher says "all this talk about the protagonist seems forced, like fanfiction," bringing me down to a 89% total. Literally the only way I could've done what they asked would be cutting 2/3 of the story and just having someone be like "no, you should just stop."
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I feel you should plead your case to the teacher. It all seems unfair, and if he knew the kind of work you put into this, he might bump you up that 1%. You deserve it, at least as far as I can see.
 
DarkGemini24601

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If it makes anyone feel better, I'm gonna put something in the Alien Character Sheets thread so you can have some preliminary reading for the aerial battle. Hope you like it.
 
BMPixy

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DarkGemini24601 said:
If it makes anyone feel better, I'm gonna put something in the Alien Character Sheets thread so you can have some preliminary reading for the aerial battle. Hope you like it.
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And I'll be throwing something up in the character bios later to remind you all of how unoriginal I am.
 
Adrammalech

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ZombieSplitter53 said:
I feel you should plead your case to the teacher. It all seems unfair, and if he knew the kind of work you put into this, he might bump you up that 1%. You deserve it, at least as far as I can see.
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Message sent. Took a fair amount of rage, egging on, and liquid courage...but the deed is done.
 
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And_So_It_Begins.jpg
 
Adrammalech

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It was great, Pixy and co. Lots of action, the new overseers, and the brain implant technogod battery. It was all great.

And well, we're all marching in today or tomorrow, so it's time for my last wartime solo. The format should look familiar to you if you have a good memory.
 
DarkGemini24601

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Adrammalech said:
It was great, Pixy and co. Lots of action, the new overseers, and the brain implant technogod battery. It was all great.

And well, we're all marching in today or tomorrow, so it's time for my last wartime solo. The format should look familiar to you if you have a good memory.
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If only some of these people had internal thoughts before, I'd recognize the colors. :confused: I thought I knew Emily's squad well enough to pick them out in a situation like this.
 
Adrammalech

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But that's part of the fun :D You can do it.

Luxuria, Ben, Nika, Sven, Kieran, Emily's mother, Dallas, Emily.
 
DarkGemini24601

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Think I had the most trouble with Nika. The drink might have been intended as a hint, but everyone (except Atka and Emily) drinks these days.
 
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