X-COM RP THINK TANK (part2)

[DarkGemini24601]

I understand what you mean... :/

Here's a small tip, but I'm not sure it'll help... Don't sit there and try to puzzle out what every single word means.
Instead, try to say the cut off words in your head, it'll sound a lot clearer like that.

I've actually been trying what you've suggested here and there, but I guess it hasn't been working... I have another idea though...

Mary is a psion now, maybe she could use her telepathy instead of talking most of the time. Because, as we know, thoughts don't have accents.

To be perfectly honest, I tried that, and I had trouble even saying a full Mary sentence. But when I do manage to, here's my problem: it doesn't really sound British. It sounds more like a young child learning to speak or someone with a speech impediment, not an accent.

“Ye’ ‘anted te’ ‘ave ‘er, an’ ye’ did… Yer’ prob’ly ‘er ‘ero now...Why are ye’ ‘utting ye’self ‘own se ‘uch?” Mary gently placed her hand on her shoulder, “Eh’... Eh’ dun’t ‘ant je’ sex… If eh’ ‘anted ‘at eh’d ‘ave ‘eft ye’ ‘as ‘oon as ye’ ‘anted meh’ te ‘op see’in o’her women… ‘Ure, th’ sex es’ ‘ice, beh’... Eh’ ‘ayed wit’ ye’ ‘cause eh’ ‘anted ye’ love… Eh’ love ye’...”

I'm no expert, but are you sure every letter you cut out is one that would sensibly be cut out in her accent? It seems random, and kinda makes the accent garbled.

I'm not asking for it's removal, since it's both too late and would cut out part of her character. But the problem is it feels like this:

A gimmick intentionally used to make your character harder to understand, which is funny and all in normal conversation, but when Mary's having a heart-to-heart it's really jarring to take in, and may conflict with the mood if it's unintelligible enough. (I suppose I'm guilty of this with Ogedei to some extent, but I try to preserve the important part of a sentence so the bastardization of grammar doesn't cost the post its meaning.)

 

[Adrammalech]

If anyone's interested in the "professional" (ew) writing standpoint from my college courses, generally only minor characters should have thick, line-by-line accents as a form of a character gimmick. Major character's accents should be given away in exposition, and backed up by sparing and non-critical phonetics (preferably humorous or stereotypical to remind them of the accent, i.e. a native Bostonian saying "wicked smaht"). So while primary characters can have accents, they should only be line-by-line in the beginning to get the point across, and then kept in exposition.

As an example for Frost:

The Woman’s eyes widened in surprise, “‘Ey! Get off me!” She spoke in a thick British accent, scowling at her.

“I’m Mary Thomas.” She said, accepting her handshake, “I ‘ope we’ll put this whole thing be’ind us an’ be friends, don’t you?”

This was from your introduction with Zombie, which is much more understandable then some of the later posts. "Hey" is not a critical word and we can accept it, "behind" is long enough that we can easily fill in the blank. The accent is good and understandable here. The only thing you could do is to up the stakes on where you say she has the accent (this is admittedly a lot harder in a collab than writing solo), i.e. "she spoke in a low, scratchy tone, and perhaps the thickest British accent Jessica had ever heard." Even if it's not the thickest, the hyperbole makes it more memorable, and it sticks to the character description harder.

“Dun’t get eny’ ideas ‘ile eh’m ‘one, or do’, if Ay’me ‘ants te’ play wit’ meh’ ‘ister eh’m ‘ot ‘oing te’ stop ‘er."

This is from the most recent post, and already I could tell you that phonetic accents shouldn't get stronger over time, because you've already established how the character talks. You can still add smaller differences (dun't, te', wit') but it shouldn't be affecting every word (while, sister, going). In this case, I still don't even know if the do' is actually "do" or shortened for something else. We should already know how Mary talks as a character at this point in the story, and we're now focused on what she's saying and not how she's saying it. She should only talk this heavily accented when it's required as a device (when she's pissed and her accent goes out of control, or for comedic relief).

Also, for some personal flavor, my personal rule is to avoid forcing anyone to reread a line. It's probably going to happen somewhere, even pros have a grammar stumble now and then, but you want to avoid it as much as possible. Emotional moments and fight scenes especially should be read fluidly, wrapping the person up in the tension until it's resolved. Obviously you can write however you want, I'm not grading you and I'm definitely not trying to be mean, I'm just saying I have to reread all of Mary's lines at least once, which in my opinion will hurt your writing more than losing the strong accent.

tl;dr: we know how Mary talks because you did a strong set-up, so the accent isn't giving you anything; if we can't understand something Mary says, then the accent is costing you something

 

[ZombieSplitter53]

Plus it would make things easier on you, if nothing else.

 

[DarkGemini24601]

Whoa, what the hell? Who could have done such a thing to the main co-op document?

Spoiler: I think I figured out the culprit.

 

[Adrammalech]

Whoa, what the hell? Who could have done such a thing to the main co-op document?

Spoiler: I think I figured out the culprit.

I helped.

 

[DarkGemini24601]

Urge to get home rises. Soon.

 

[Adrammalech]

*runs away giggling from vandalism*

 

[Dahlexpert]

What the actual fuck, happened to the docks?

 

[Frostlich1228]

"The Multi-Cripple"

I Lolled

 

[Frostlich1228]

If anyone's interested in the "professional" (ew) writing standpoint from my college courses, generally only minor characters should have thick, line-by-line accents as a form of a character gimmick. Major character's accents should be given away in exposition, and backed up by sparing and non-critical phonetics (preferably humorous or stereotypical to remind them of the accent, i.e. a native Bostonian saying "wicked smaht"). So while primary characters can have accents, they should only be line-by-line in the beginning to get the point across, and then kept in exposition.

As an example for Frost:


This was from your introduction with Zombie, which is much more understandable then some of the later posts. "Hey" is not a critical word and we can accept it, "behind" is long enough that we can easily fill in the blank. The accent is good and understandable here. The only thing you could do is to up the stakes on where you say she has the accent (this is admittedly a lot harder in a collab than writing solo), i.e. "she spoke in a low, scratchy tone, and perhaps the thickest British accent Jessica had ever heard." Even if it's not the thickest, the hyperbole makes it more memorable, and it sticks to the character description harder.



This is from the most recent post, and already I could tell you that phonetic accents shouldn't get stronger over time, because you've already established how the character talks. You can still add smaller differences (dun't, te', wit') but it shouldn't be affecting every word (while, sister, going). In this case, I still don't even know if the do' is actually "do" or shortened for something else. We should already know how Mary talks as a character at this point in the story, and we're now focused on what she's saying and not how she's saying it. She should only talk this heavily accented when it's required as a device (when she's pissed and her accent goes out of control, or for comedic relief).

Also, for some personal flavor, my personal rule is to avoid forcing anyone to reread a line. It's probably going to happen somewhere, even pros have a grammar stumble now and then, but you want to avoid it as much as possible. Emotional moments and fight scenes especially should be read fluidly, wrapping the person up in the tension until it's resolved. Obviously you can write however you want, I'm not grading you and I'm definitely not trying to be mean, I'm just saying I have to reread all of Mary's lines at least once, which in my opinion will hurt your writing more than losing the strong accent.

tl;dr: we know how Mary talks because you did a strong set-up, so the accent isn't giving you anything; if we can't understand something Mary says, then the accent is costing you something

I'll take your advice and try to make her accent less... unreadable...

I just wish you guys would've said something earlier, I didn't think you guys had this much of a problem reading it. :/

 

[DarkGemini24601]

What the actual fuck, happened to the docks?

The gempocaylpse.

 

[DarkGemini24601]

I'll take your advice and try to make her accent less... unreadable...

I just wish you guys would've said something earlier, I didn't think you guys had this much of a problem reading it. :/

Again, we're not really upset, it just (like Ramma said) seems to have gotten more and more unintelligible, to the point where we're struggling. That's the only reason I brought it up. Not to give you shit, but because I genuinely don't want people to struggle with posts involving Mary or avoid them.

 

[Frostlich1228]

IN OTHER NEWS. I HAVE FOR YOU ALL AN AMAZING, SNEAK PEEK AT SPECIAL POST I'VE BEEN WORKING ON FOR THE PAST FEW WEEKS.

From this moment forward I have decided that Sci-Fi of this caliber is no longer fitting of my great writing ability, so, I decided to give you all a taste of what's to come for my writing talent. (I have also decided I am going to talk in size 5 font forever.)

I asked myself, Frost, X-Com is great and all, but it's getting kind of old, I mean we've done it all before!
So, what could make it better? How could I fix this rut we're all in? The Answer? Ponies!

So here it is, my newest masterpiece, now 20% cooler than the last.

"X-Com, Out of This World!"

Spoiler: Amazing Story: Ponies Ahead

Ammelia opened her eyes, the environment forming around her in a grid as always, but, something was strange about this place. She could feel the soft grass under her feet, wherever she was, she wasn't anywhere on the base. She was on her hands and knees as she looked around her environment, she sat in the middle of a large area of grass, hills rolling up and down before reaching the end of the SAaIDA's range. Ammy attempted to stand up, but found it strangely difficult as she fell back on her han- hooves!? Her eyes widened as she looked down to see that her hands had been replaced by flat hooves, she looked towards her legs to see that they had also turned into hooves.

"Wh-What's going on?" The sniper replied with extreme confusion. "This has to be a dream... But... What am I even dreaming about? And am I a pony!?" She asked herself, not getting a single answer. However, when she spoke a soft, tired moan came from behind Ammelia, catching her attention. She turned around to see what seemed to be a female pony laying face down in the grass, sleeping heavily. The small mammal had a raggedy looking, but straightly cut mane and tail, with what appeared to be a unicorn's horn poking out of the top of her head and through her ha- mane-doo...

Ammelia took a few steps towards the sleeping pony, podding at her side with her front-right hoof. "Um... Excuse me..." She spoke softly, trying to awaken the creature as gently as possible. The female ponies eye's didn't bother to open as it rolled over in the grass, "'Ey... Prin'ess... 'At're ye' 'oing en' 'ere se' early? Eh'm still 'sleep..."

Ammelia's eyes widen as the pony spoke in an all too familiar accent, "M-Mary?!"

Mary's eyes fully opened at her sister's distressed voice, she looked up at the strange horse standing above her, looking extremely similar to the horses from her favorite show growing up. The pony had bright, golden hair and piercing sapphire eyes. It's skin was an extremely pale white and it's mane was done up in a stylish bun with a white unicorn horn sticking out of it, it almost looked like...

"Mary... Is that you?" Ammelia spoke as the gunner shot up onto her four legs.

"Wha-" The Mary pony looked around, "Ye' 'ets meh'! Es' at you!?"

Ammy nodded, looked down at her strange new body, "I don't understand... Is this a dream? What is this?"

"Eh' 'ink 'ere ponies..." Mary answered, looking down at herself, the thin hair on her body was the same pale white as Ammelia's but less well kept, making it appear duller. A stand of Mary's hair fell into her face, letting her see that it was still her normal dark brown color. At least something stayed the same... She thought. "Et' 'ould beh' eh' dream... Beh' 'eve ne'er 'eard eh' two 'eople dream'in th' 'ame thing be'ore..."

"Wait..." Ammelia stopped and recalled something, "I think I heard something about Identical twins appearing in each others dreams before... And if my memory isn't right, maybe this has something to do with how Acedia combined our dreamcapes into one during our mission momentarily..."

"Eh' 'uess 'at 'akes sense..." Mary said, still puzzled about the situation, "Se' 'at 'ere we' 'unna do 'ow? Wake 'erselves up?"

"Actually... Why do that?" Ammelia suggested, "I mean... We're both in a lucent dream together... This is a once in a lifetime kind of thing isn't it? Why waste it by just leaving? Why not just explore a little bit?"

Mary raised her front-left hoof to her chin, "'Ell... suppose 'et couldn't 'urt..."

"So... where do we go then?" Ammelia asked, looking around but still seeing nothing but grass in every direction, Mary looked around herself, her normal eyes allowing her to see much farther. The terrian was extremely bright and colorful, the grass bright green, the sky practically glowing blue, the landscape pretty much glowed with cartoony-ness. The most notable sight was a small, rural looking village a decent distance away, the houses were fairly nuetral in color and all the roofs were covered in thatch. However, far, far into the distance above the village was a humongous castle connected to the side of a large mountain with waterfalls running down the mountain and out of it. This appeared to be the most distinguishable landmark but it looked as though it was a hundred miles away.

Mary pointed her hoof towards the village, "'Ere's eh' village o'er 'ere, it's th' closest thing te' civilization or' 'while."

"Then I guess that's where we're heading then, lead the way Mary." Ammelia said, smiling at her pony sister.

 

[ZombieSplitter53]

I'll take your advice and try to make her accent less... unreadable...

I just wish you guys would've said something earlier, I didn't think you guys had this much of a problem reading it. :/

I'm not upset, just... friendly advice. Love Mary too much not to understand what she's saying. Just think of it like how I eventually moved past Ayame's broken English in Season Three.

 

[DarkGemini24601]

IN OTHER NEWS. I HAVE FOR YOU ALL AN AMAZING, SNEAK PEEK AT SPECIAL POST I'VE BEEN WORKING ON FOR THE PAST FEW WEEKS.

From this moment forward I have decided that Sci-Fi of this caliber is no longer fitting of my great writing ability, so, I decided to give you all a taste of what's to come for my writing talent. (I have also decided I am going to talk in size 5 font forever.)

I asked myself, Frost, X-Com is great and all, but it's getting kind of old, I mean we've done it all before!
So, what could make it better? How could I fix this rut we're all in? The Answer? Ponies!

So here it is, my newest masterpiece, now 20% cooler than the last.

"X-Com, Out of This World!"

Spoiler: Amazing Story: Ponies Ahead

Ammelia opened her eyes, the environment forming around her in a grid as always, but, something was strange about this place. She could feel the soft grass under her feet, wherever she was, she wasn't anywhere on the base. She was on her hands and knees as she looked around her environment, she sat in the middle of a large area of grass, hills rolling up and down before reaching the end of the SAaIDA's range. Ammy attempted to stand up, but found it strangely difficult as she fell back on her han- hooves!? Her eyes widened as she looked down to see that her hands had been replaced by flat hooves, she looked towards her legs to see that they had also turned into hooves.

"Wh-What's going on?" The sniper replied with extreme confusion. "This has to be a dream... But... What am I even dreaming about? And am I a pony!?" She asked herself, not getting a single answer. However, when she spoke a soft, tired moan came from behind Ammelia, catching her attention. She turned around to see what seemed to be a female pony laying face down in the grass, sleeping heavily. The small mammal had a raggedy looking, but straightly cut mane and tail, with what appeared to be a unicorn's horn poking out of the top of her head and through her ha- mane-doo...

Ammelia took a few steps towards the sleeping pony, podding at her side with her front-right hoof. "Um... Excuse me..." She spoke softly, trying to awaken the creature as gently as possible. The female ponies eye's didn't bother to open as it rolled over in the grass, "'Ey... Prin'ess... 'At're ye' 'oing en' 'ere se' early? Eh'm still 'sleep..."

Ammelia's eyes widen as the pony spoke in an all too familiar accent, "M-Mary?!"

Mary's eyes fully opened at her sister's distressed voice, she looked up at the strange horse standing above her, looking extremely similar to the horses from her favorite show growing up. The pony had bright, golden hair and piercing sapphire eyes. It's skin was an extremely pale white and it's mane was done up in a stylish bun with a white unicorn horn sticking out of it, it almost looked like...

"Mary... Is that you?" Ammelia spoke as the gunner shot up onto her four legs.

"Wha-" The Mary pony looked around, "Ye' 'ets meh'! Es' at you!?"

Ammy nodded, looked down at her strange new body, "I don't understand... Is this a dream? What is this?"

"Eh' 'ink 'ere ponies..." Mary answered, looking down at herself, the thin hair on her body was the same pale white as Ammelia's but less well kept, making it appear duller. A stand of Mary's hair fell into her face, letting her see that it was still her normal dark brown color. At least something stayed the same... She thought. "Et' 'ould beh' eh' dream... Beh' 'eve ne'er 'eard eh' two 'eople dream'in th' 'ame thing be'ore..."

"Wait..." Ammelia stopped and recalled something, "I think I heard something about Identical twins appearing in each others dreams before... And if my memory isn't right, maybe this has something to do with how Acedia combined our dreamcapes into one during our mission momentarily..."

"Eh' 'uess 'at 'akes sense..." Mary said, still puzzled about the situation, "Se' 'at 'ere we' 'unna do 'ow? Wake 'erselves up?"
"Actually... Why do that?" Ammelia suggested, "I mean... We're both in a lucent dream together... This is a once in a lifetime kind of thing isn't it? Why waste it by just leaving? Why not just explore a little bit?"

Mary raised her front-left hoof to her chin, "'Ell... suppose 'et couldn't 'urt..."

"So... where do we go then?" Ammelia asked, looking around but still seeing nothing but grass in every direction,
Mary looked around herself, her normal eyes allowing her to see much farther. The terrian was extremely bright and colorful, the grass bright green, the sky practically glowing blue, the landscape pretty much glowed with cartoony-ness. The most notable sight was a small, rural looking village a decent distance away, the houses were fairly nuetral in color and all the roofs were covered in thatch. However, far, far into the distance above the village was a humongous castle connected to the side of a large mountain with waterfalls running down the mountain and out of it. This appeared to be the most distinguishable landmark but it looked as though it was a hundred miles away.

Mary pointed her hoof towards the village, "'Ere's eh' village o'er 'ere, it's th' closest thing te' civilization or' 'while."

"Then I guess that's where we're heading then, lead the way Mary." Ammelia said, smiling at her pony sister.

Gr8 b8 m8

 

[Adrammalech]

The Answer? Ponies!

 

[ZombieSplitter53]

IN OTHER NEWS. I HAVE FOR YOU ALL AN AMAZING, SNEAK PEEK AT SPECIAL POST I'VE BEEN WORKING ON FOR THE PAST FEW WEEKS.

From this moment forward I have decided that Sci-Fi of this caliber is no longer fitting of my great writing ability, so, I decided to give you all a taste of what's to come for my writing talent. (I have also decided I am going to talk in size 5 font forever.)

I asked myself, Frost, X-Com is great and all, but it's getting kind of old, I mean we've done it all before!
So, what could make it better? How could I fix this rut we're all in? The Answer? Ponies!

So here it is, my newest masterpiece, now 20% cooler than the last.

"X-Com, Out of This World!"

Spoiler: Amazing Story: Ponies Ahead

Ammelia opened her eyes, the environment forming around her in a grid as always, but, something was strange about this place. She could feel the soft grass under her feet, wherever she was, she wasn't anywhere on the base. She was on her hands and knees as she looked around her environment, she sat in the middle of a large area of grass, hills rolling up and down before reaching the end of the SAaIDA's range. Ammy attempted to stand up, but found it strangely difficult as she fell back on her han- hooves!? Her eyes widened as she looked down to see that her hands had been replaced by flat hooves, she looked towards her legs to see that they had also turned into hooves.

"Wh-What's going on?" The sniper replied with extreme confusion. "This has to be a dream... But... What am I even dreaming about? And am I a pony!?" She asked herself, not getting a single answer. However, when she spoke a soft, tired moan came from behind Ammelia, catching her attention. She turned around to see what seemed to be a female pony laying face down in the grass, sleeping heavily. The small mammal had a raggedy looking, but straightly cut mane and tail, with what appeared to be a unicorn's horn poking out of the top of her head and through her ha- mane-doo...

Ammelia took a few steps towards the sleeping pony, podding at her side with her front-right hoof. "Um... Excuse me..." She spoke softly, trying to awaken the creature as gently as possible. The female ponies eye's didn't bother to open as it rolled over in the grass, "'Ey... Prin'ess... 'At're ye' 'oing en' 'ere se' early? Eh'm still 'sleep..."

Ammelia's eyes widen as the pony spoke in an all too familiar accent, "M-Mary?!"

Mary's eyes fully opened at her sister's distressed voice, she looked up at the strange horse standing above her, looking extremely similar to the horses from her favorite show growing up. The pony had bright, golden hair and piercing sapphire eyes. It's skin was an extremely pale white and it's mane was done up in a stylish bun with a white unicorn horn sticking out of it, it almost looked like...

"Mary... Is that you?" Ammelia spoke as the gunner shot up onto her four legs.

"Wha-" The Mary pony looked around, "Ye' 'ets meh'! Es' at you!?"

Ammy nodded, looked down at her strange new body, "I don't understand... Is this a dream? What is this?"

"Eh' 'ink 'ere ponies..." Mary answered, looking down at herself, the thin hair on her body was the same pale white as Ammelia's but less well kept, making it appear duller. A stand of Mary's hair fell into her face, letting her see that it was still her normal dark brown color. At least something stayed the same... She thought. "Et' 'ould beh' eh' dream... Beh' 'eve ne'er 'eard eh' two 'eople dream'in th' 'ame thing be'ore..."

"Wait..." Ammelia stopped and recalled something, "I think I heard something about Identical twins appearing in each others dreams before... And if my memory isn't right, maybe this has something to do with how Acedia combined our dreamcapes into one during our mission momentarily..."

"Eh' 'uess 'at 'akes sense..." Mary said, still puzzled about the situation, "Se' 'at 'ere we' 'unna do 'ow? Wake 'erselves up?"

"Actually... Why do that?" Ammelia suggested, "I mean... We're both in a lucent dream together... This is a once in a lifetime kind of thing isn't it? Why waste it by just leaving? Why not just explore a little bit?"

Mary raised her front-left hoof to her chin, "'Ell... suppose 'et couldn't 'urt..."

"So... where do we go then?" Ammelia asked, looking around but still seeing nothing but grass in every direction, Mary looked around herself, her normal eyes allowing her to see much farther. The terrian was extremely bright and colorful, the grass bright green, the sky practically glowing blue, the landscape pretty much glowed with cartoony-ness. The most notable sight was a small, rural looking village a decent distance away, the houses were fairly nuetral in color and all the roofs were covered in thatch. However, far, far into the distance above the village was a humongous castle connected to the side of a large mountain with waterfalls running down the mountain and out of it. This appeared to be the most distinguishable landmark but it looked as though it was a hundred miles away.

Mary pointed her hoof towards the village, "'Ere's eh' village o'er 'ere, it's th' closest thing te' civilization or' 'while."

"Then I guess that's where we're heading then, lead the way Mary." Ammelia said, smiling at her pony sister.

 

[Frostlich1228]

Spoiler: More Ponies! <3

When they finally reached the town they found themselves walking up a long dirt road. They were two-story thatched roof houses on both sides of the street, but other than that the road was surprisingly empty.

"Where do you think everyone is?" Ammy asked looking up at her sister.

"'Eh dun't 'ow... You'd 'ink 'ere'd be someone en' th' street 'is 'ime eh' day." Mary answered, the position of the sun showing her that it was about noon.

"Wait... There's someone..." Ammy said, using her hoof to point to a pony walking down the street in their direction. It had a bright pink body with a darker, almost salmon pink, curly mane and tail. On both of her upper back legs was a symbol of three balloons, two blue, one yellow. She had a soft smile as she walked closer and closer to the two.

Ammelia waved at the bright pnik pony with a friendly smile. "Hello, there."

The pony jumped back letting out an exaggerated gasp, her head looking back and forth between Mary and Ammelia rapidly as she talked without even stopping to catch her breath. "Ooohmygoshohmygoshohmygoooosh!! I've never seen you two around here before and that must mean you're new here because I know everypony in ponyville and I know all their birthdays and their anniversaries and their favorite foods! Hello my name is Pinkamena Diane Pie but you can just call be Pinkie Pie cause Pinkamena is kinda long and boring and not very fun but I still like it 'cause my parents gave me that name and because I love my parents I also love the name but it's just soooo long and people forget what it is sometimes so I just go by Pinkie because it's short and sweet like a delicious chocolate cake with a cherry on top, covered in whipped cream and yummy icing, you know!?"

Mary and Ammelia's eyes widened as they both looked at the hyper pony. "Uh... It's nice to meet you too... My name's Ammelia, and this is Mary."

"Heeeeey, those are pretty unique names you got there! I guess that means you two are really, really not from around here, huh? But that's okay because you're here now and everypony here is my friend! You two want to be my friends right!?" She asked excitedly.

Ammy looked over to her sister, then back at Pinkie, "Uh... Sure..."

The pink pony brought them both in for a hug, "Ohmygosh! We're going to be the best of friends! Oh wait, hang on a second you guys!" She said running behind one of the houses and pushing out a pink pull cart with a few gold and light blue accents. The cart also had three balloons on both sides, two were blue, while one was gold, just like the symbol on her upper back legs, it looked very stylish. "Thiiiiis, is my 'Welcome to Ponyville' cart! It even comes with a song and everything! Here, let me start!"

She pressed a large red button on the side of the cart and it sprung to life, golden horns and flags popping out of the inside of it and playing a catchy little upbeat melody as she started to sing. "Welcome, Welcome, Welcome, a fine welcome to you! Welcome, Welcome, Welcome, I say how do you do? Welcome, Welcome, Welcome, I say Hip-Hip Horay! Welcome, Welcome, Welcome to Ponyville Todaaaaaaaay!" As she finished she slid across the dirt road towards them on her knees with her front legs in both direction in a welcoming gesture.

"Well, that was...nice." Ammelia replied, smiling.

"Waaaait for it..." Pinkie said as a door on the front of the cart swung open, revealing a slice of what appeared to be a strawberry and vanilla cake and multicolored confetti shot out from the top. Pinkie looked at it, almost as if she expected something else to happen, "Whew..." she said with relief, "I didn't put the cake in the confetti cannons this time!"

"Mmm" Mary salivated, "Eh... can eh' 'ave that?"

"Of course you can, silly! I didn't make so you couldn't eat it, that'd just be weird! I don't bake cakes just to look at them, I bake them so my friends can revel in thier sweet, fluffy, deliciousness, and you two are both my super awesome bestest friends now!"

"Well, Thanks Pinkie Pie..." Ammelia said with a friendly tone, "So... Where is everyone today? Your town isn't always this empty I take it?"

"Well, you'd be right! It isn't normally like this, it's usually all hustle-ly and bustle-ly, but today is a super duper special day!" She with a extremely bright smile.

"Why? What's going on today?" Ammelia said as Mary walked up to the cart, trying to figure out how to eat the cake with no plate or fingers.

"You don't know?! Wowee! You two much be really, crazy, far out of town if you don't know what today is! That's how important!"

"I guess we've... Just been living under a rock I guess." Ammelia replied, trying to be convincing but in all honesty didn't know why a pony in her own weird pony dream expected her to know these things.

"You've been living under a rock!? Wow! You should meet my sister then, she loves rocks! In fact, she's getting her rock-terate in rock science!"

"Wait, rock science? So she's a geologist?" Ammelia confirmed, tilting her head.

"Yup, Yup, Yup! But geologist just sounds so boring, I just prefer rock scientist! She's super good at it too, she should be though, considering the fact that me and her spent our entire childhoods around rocks! Our family was all rock farmers you know!" Pinkie said, tilting her head to the side and making a obviously fake bored face.

"Rock Farmers?" Ammy thought out loud. How does one go about farming rocks?

Pinkie busted out in a chuckle, rolling around on the floor, "With a shovel, duh!"

The sniper-pony's eyes widened, "Wait did you just..."

"Well, Anyway!" Pinkie interrupted her question, "I guess I should probably tell you what's going on today if you don't know! Ponyville placed first in the Equestria Games, everyone's at Twilight's house celebrating! I'm handing out the invites! I mean, Twilight told me that I didn't need invites because everyone in ponyville was going to be invited anyway, but invites are how serious parties are thrown, and all my parties have to be absolutely one-hundred and ten percent serious! You'll have the time of your life or you're money back garranteed! Well, I don't make them pay anything to come, but if they did pay something, then you'd be sure they'd get their money back garranteed! Good thing I always, always, allllways, bring an extra fifty-two point two invites just in case fifty-two point two new ponies show up that day!" She said, pulling out two invites from somewhere behind her with her mouth and giving them to Ammelia. "Here you are! Two tickets to the superiest duperiest party in Ponyville, I'll even take you there myself! You'll be my special guest and you'll get to play special guest games with all the ponies there, doesn't that sound fun!?"

The Equestria Games? Best not to ask what that is too, It sure sounds like It's a big thing around here. "Yeah, that does sound fun! I'll be happy to come." Ammelia agreed, grabbing the invites using the only thing she had available, her teeth.

"Okee Dokey Loki! Let's go then! When we get there, I'll introduce you to all my friends! Maybe we'll even see them on the way there, wouldn't that be amazing!?" Pinkie said as she turned around, hopping off down the street.

Ammy waited till she was out of earshot before speaking to Mary, being forced to drop the papers on top of pinkie's cart in order to speak. "Well... She sure is... Energetic."

Mary stood over the peice of cake, not even bothering to try and pick it up anymore and simply eating it straight off the plate as the cart was just about the same height as her mouth. "Yeh', she's 'efinetily 'ot th' same 'inkie pie eh' 'ow from my 'ears of 'atch'in my 'ittle pony as eh' kid."
Ammy gave her sister a curious look, using the pink cart to hold the invations and pushing it forward so she could continue talking to her sister.

"You watched my little pony as a kid?"

"Eh' 'as eh' 'ittle 'irl, 'at de' ye' 'spect?"

"Just a little hard to picture is all." Ammelia answered, "So do you know anything about this place?"

"'Ext te' noth'in eh'm 'fraid, 'ike eh' said, 'is place es' 'ot 'ike th' MLP eh' 'member."

"Well, lets go to this party then. We can find out more about where we are, and it'd be very rude is we just denied her invite now."

"Yeh', 'ood eh'dea..."

 

[Frostlich1228]

Spoiler: PONIES PONIES PONIES PONIES

As the two sisters walked with Pinkie down the dirt road, the thatched roof building on etiher side became more dense, the road also let to a large opening and a huge, almost gazebo looking, four story tower.

Pinkie turned her head back towards the sisters and then looked back towards the road. However she stopped to do a double take when noticed something she hadn't before, dashing up with blinding speed to look at Ammelia's upper back leg. "You guys don't have your cutie marks yet?"
"Uhh... Cutie Mark?" She couldn't stop herself from asking.

"You know, Cutie Marks! The symbol on your flank that tells the world your special talent? You know, I'm beginning to think you two aren't just from out of town..." Pinkie replied, with a little suspicion in her voice.

"I... What do you mean?" Ammelia looked left and right.

"I've got it!" Pinkie jumped back, "Either you're from another dimension where aliens from outer space have attacked the world with thier plasma weaponry and high tech Ufos!" She blurted out with her hyper voice before speaking in a bored tone again, "Or you're just really, really late bloomers... Either or I guess!"


"Okay..." Ammelia said with eyes wide, "This is certainly the strangest dream I've ever had..."

"Yeh... Meh' te'..." Mary seconded.

"Dream? I'm not a dream you two! If I was a dream, I wouldn't feel this!" PInkamena Diane Pie said, bopping herself in the side of head with her hoof, "Ow... See?! Not a dream!"

"But you are a dream!" Ammelia tried to convince her, "Watch I'll change something!" Ammy looked around at a flower next to her, trying to make it grow with her mind, but having no success, "What?! Why can't I control anything? This is suppose to be a lucent dream!"

"'Maybe..." Mary thought, "'Aybe et's real..."

"Yup! Totally real! You've got my Pinkie Party Promise!" She butted into the conversation.

"N-No... Impossible..." Ammelia looked up at her saying, "This has to be a dream, I mean we're ponies, what other way can I explain this?!"

"Waaaait a minute!" Pinkie said, "You're not ponies?" She gasped, "Are you.... Humans?!"

"'How de' ye' know 'at humans are, there aren't eny' humans in ye' 'orld eh' dun't think..." Mary asked the pink pony.

"Well, you're right when you say that there aren't humans HERE." She answered, still smiling, "We've been to the human world before, or, at least Twilight and Spike have, I just stayed behind and ate cake 'cause Celestia said it was too dangerous for all of us to go at once."

"Wait, so this is another world?" Like an different dimension?" Ammelia asked.

"I guess. Twilight said there are all kinds of different dimensions! Like one where it rains nothing but chocolate, or one made entirely out of candy!" Pinkie said.

"Me and my dad have always considered the possibility of different dimentions, but I never thought I would actually visit one..." The sniper responded, putting her fist to her chin in thought, "Of course... We still haven't fully ruled out that this isn't a dream yet... I guess this Twilight is the per- pony... to see then."

"Gooood thing we're already going that way! Twilight should be at the party, considering it's at her house and all. I'm sure you'll like her, she's really into science and learning about new things. She's also princess Celestia's personal student, or was, you could say that she's her own teacher now! You know, I really wish I was my own teacher, that'd be great! I'd throw parties for my students everyday! And buy them balloons! And confetti! And teach them how to use my party cannon!"

As Pinkie finished her sentence a lightning fast light blue blur flew overhead, the blur did a few tricks like barrel rolls and aileron rolls in the sky above them. After a few moves the strange winged figure went for a more complex trick, however it snagged one of said wings on the branch of a nearby tree, sending it hurdling into the ground with insane speed, leaving behind a small crater.

A small cyan pony with two blue wings laid in the middle of the crater, not visibly injured but certainly in alot of pain. Her mane was short and spiky, the color, a vibrant full rainbow, her 'cutie mark', a cloud with a rainbow lightning bolt striking downwards. Pinkie dashed with surprising speed over to the crater, stopping at it's edge and looking down at the pony, "Wow, great landing Dashie! I rate it ten pink, perfect, party hats out of ten!"

The cyan pony wiped the dirt of herself with her front right hoof and looked up at pinkie, "You saw it, that wasn't a great landing, in fact I completely botched my trick. Who put that tree there anyway?"

"I dunno, probably nature." Pinkie replied with a happy grin.

"Yeah? Well then nature needs to stay out of my way." The rainbow pony replied, looking over at Mary and Ammelia, "Who're your friends? Don't think I've seen them around here before."

"Thiiiiis is Ammelia and Mary, they're new here!" Pinkie pointed at both of the sisters with her hoof, winking at them.

The rainbow pony nodded her head a little, smirking, "Weird names you got there. Well, I'm Rainbow Dash, the fastest flyer in all of Equestria, and might I add, reserve wonderbolt. Nice to meet you."

"'Nice te' meet ye' too." Mary spoke, looking the pony up and down.

"Whoa, heck of an accent you got there, how do people even understand you?" Rainbow asked.

"Te' beh' honest, eh'm not 'ure if 'eople understand meh' or they je' smile an' nod whenever eh' talk." Mary shrugged, smiling a little.

Rainbow began to smile and nod as she looked at Mary. "Wait? What did you say? Something about honesty right?" She said sarcastically.

"Yeh', eh' was talk'in 'bout 'ow yer' honestly eh' terrible flyer." Mary countered, chuckling a little.

"Still a better flyer than you. Not like that's very hard to do though..." Dashie replied, chuckling back.

Mary put on a fake frown before chuckling back, "Eh' 'ike ye' 'Ainbow Dash."

"Next thing I know you'll want to marry me." The pony responded, putting a hoof to her chest.

"Marriage in'nt' my 'ing hun', eh' 'fer te' 'ake et' casual me'self."

"I'd rather focus on my tricks than get married anyway, wouldn't want a stallion clipping my wings you know?"

"Eh' know 'ow ye' feel."

"So you guys heading to the party too, right?" Rainbow replied, looking over at pinkie.

"Yup! I'd never miss my own party!" Pinkie responded jubilantly,"You're coming to the party too arn't you?"

"Wouldn't miss it Pinkie." She replied, taking off and hovering a few feet overhead, "I just thought of a sweet new trick on the way there and just had to try it, but I might just need to practice a bit more."

"Well, see you at the party Rainbow! I hope you've practiced your pin-the-tail-on-the-pony skills since then!" The pink pony replied.

"Yeeeaaah.... Totally didn't forget..." Dash replied, breathing in through her teeth before taking off over the buildings.

Pinkie kept hopping down the street and motioned for the sisters to follow again, "You two really hit it off! I can see you being bestest friends in no time!"

"Yeh'... Eh' can see 'at..." Mary nodded continuing to walk.

 

[Frostlich1228]

Spoiler: End of Ponies :d

After another few minutes they reached another large two story house, but this one was intricately decorated to look like it had been made from candy and sweets. Iceing lined a room that looked like it was made from gingerbread with a cupcake shaped tower protruding from it.
Pinkie stopped in front of the door and looked towards the twins once again, "I'm going to stop in here for a second to get supplies for a super secret game I'm going to have at the party!" She said, point down the dirt street with her hoof, "Twilight's house should be about two-thousand six hundred and forty point two feet in that direction, it's inside the giant tree, you'd have to be blind to miss it! Good thing neither of you two are!"

Mary gave her sister a blank look, but Ammy knew what it meant, "Se'... Je' 'eep walking?"

"Yup! I'll see you two at the party! Or on the way! Or on the way to the party!" The pink pony said as she entered the candy house, leaving the two alone.

"Well... I guess we keep walking then..." Ammelia replied as they did just that, but only after a few steps another pony walked backwards from an intersecting street with three ducklings following her. The pony was a sunlight yellow and her mane and tail, a flowery light pink, she also had three pink and blue butterfly symbols on her upper left leg, and presumably, on her right as well. She turned her head and saw the two looking at her, when she did, she jumped back a little before crouching down low, hiding her face from them.

"Uhh... Hello..." Ammelia said trying to be as friendly as possible, "You don't need to be scared of us... We're just... fellow ponies..."

The small creature looked up and her three ducklings hid behind her, "Y-Yeah, I-I know b-but... Ponies I d-don't know m-make me n-nervous..."

"Hey... Hey it's alright... I promise we're not going to hurt you or anything." Ammy replied, smiling at the yellow pony.

She stood up slowly and apprehensively, "Y-You do? I... o-okay..."

"My name's Ammelia and this is Mary... We're... new here..." She spoke softly to the girl still partially hiding her face, "May I ask your name?"

"I-I... F-fluttershy..." The pony said, shrinking down a little.

"Fluttershy? Eh' wonder why 'ey call 'er that..." Mary said sarcastically.

"B-because that's my n-name? " She replied, clearly not picking up on the sarcasm.

"It's nice to meet you Fluttershy, I love your cute little ducklings." Ammy spoke gently.

"R-Really? Thank you... I-I raised them myself... Since they were c-chicks..." She responded, finally making eye contact with Ammelia, "B-But I have to t-take them t-to PInkie's p-party because they can't be left alone..."

"You're going to Pinkie's party too? But I though you said you don't like people?" Ammelia asked.

"They... M-make me nervous... B-but Pinkie said I don't have to be in the main p-party with every one else... she said she'll be throwing a sp-special, quiet party for me and my a-animals..."

"So you like taking care of animals?" The sniper asked the shy girl.

She nodded her heady slowly, "I've loved a-animals every since I was a k-kid... I can c-communicate with them..."

"I know someone back home who could do that... She has this big dog named Takukaq and she found out that talking to animals was just the beginning of what she could do." Ammelia said.

"R-really?" Fluttershy replied, perking up, "I've n-never met anyone else who c-could do that... What's her name?"

"Atka." Ammy answered.

"A-Atka...? That's a p-pretty name... Maybe I could... pay her a visit sometime... and help take care of her d-doggie... I have lots of d-doggies back home." The pony mused.

"That... Might be a little hard..."

"W-Why?" Fluttershy tilted her head.

"She's... really, really far away..." Ammelia responded.

"Oh..." she replied, visibly upset.

"It's okay I'll... tell her you want to talk to her, maybe she could even come by and pay you a visit. How does that sound?" Ammelia smiled comfortingly.

"Th-That sounds nice... Um..." The pony hesitated, "Could y-you walk to the party? I could use some company... y-you could help me watch my ducklings..."

"Yeah, we're heading that way anyway, no harm in walking there together." The sniper said, taknig a few steps forwards.
"Th-Thanks, you're really nice..."

"I... Don't mention it..." Ammelia responded as they kept walking down the road. The pony reminded her so much of Buniq, almost like she was this world's version, but the thought of Buniq tugged at Ammy's heart a little. What if this isn't a dream? What if this is a seperate reality... What if I can't get home?

I would like to give a shoutout to all my favorite Rp characters as we stride headlong into this new, amazing chapter of our Rp!

------Ashley
------Ponsettia
-AssuR
---EmIly
-ScarLet

------------Fedor Popadopolous
------------Odegai
DesperatiO
------------Luxeria
------------Sunny