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I skimmed through a few of the requests in the last page, writing down my thoughts as I went along. One mistake I saw that recurred is to/too, you may want to keep an eye on that in future posts (don't worry, I have the same problem with it's/its). Other than that, it's good in the grammar...

Thank you kindly. I hope you're right, it would be nice to expound on my character with some less rigid narratives.

Wow, a lot of people posted since I did my little evaluations, lol. I'll try to look at some of these later if I get a chance before the applications video goes up. If someone wants to look at mine, it's in my signature. :)

No problem, glad I could help. :)

Yours is great, I only saw one typo (named instead of name in the first line) and the format is pretty solid. The only thing I'd say is to separate and label when the biographical description stops and the dialogue begins. I like the idea of Angel and Odd bonding over their weird names. :p

A few things I notice straight away: you should always place a space after any punctuation, not just periods. Also, use ellipses (...) sparingly, and only ever use three periods in them. You should also press enter twice for line breaks on these forums, so there's a visual break in text. i.e...

I thought it was the opposite, you have to seem normal enough to be accepted, then you're free to become as crazy as possible. I would think a little psychosis has to be an assumed part of the job, especially if you suddenly get telekinesis or get all your limbs replaced.

Yeah, he said he has other commitments in his life and there are obviously a lot more applications than he might've expected for this season. A little delay won't kill us. Probably.

You could also have someone poor who needs to provide for their loved ones (platonic or romantic) as well, in a indirect "I'll die for my family/love" way. That's assuming XCOM isn't officially conscripting everyone and actually pays or provides for their soldiers, even though some members in...

She might also request a soldier refrain from using explosives or convince the commander/Bradford of being more careful about giving such orders. It would probably be insubordinate to do so, but Vahlen is nothing if not insistent.

I hope no one minds me chiming in here as I've been a silent observer until now, but I think I understand both sides of the coin here, and I agree with Suryce's breakdown of why the posting limit would be good. When a small number of people are creating a large density of the content - even if...

First Name: Daniel Last Name: Veilleux Nickname: Blank Gender: Male Nationality: French Biographical Synopsis: Veilleux is an excellent and versatile soldier. He has proven himself a capable footman and a clever strategist, as well as having a relatively cool head on his shoulders. He has a...