Adrammalech
Well-Known Member
The part at the end with Emily's mother telling her that Emily knew she could come back, simply from her presence in her mind, was interesting. I do hope we see some resolution in that.
Though I have to say, after that part with Zoe, I realized that reading these memory posts makes me feel... a little dirty, like I'm peaking into Emily's diary, especially when things start to get hot 'n heavy.
Indeed, it's the main downside of Emily's memory (although it worked for the interrogation) that she can't subconsciously change or hide memories like normal people often do. But your characters aren't hearing it, so you don't have to worry about violating her privacy the advantages of fiction!